Peer Response: Paper 1 Two benefits of peer response: 1) you get feedback from your classmates on your paper before submitting it for a grade; 2) examining the strengths and weaknesses of someone else's writing can help you recognize strengths and weaknesses in your own work.
How it works: You read your peer's draft critically, then respond with advice on how the paper might be improved. When you're finished, give the paper and your written response back to the author. Later, read your classmate's comments on your paper, and if you agree with the suggestions, revise your paper accordingly, addressing the problems and weaknesses noted by your peer. Turn in your classmate's response to your work along with your paper when you turn in the final draft.
Get mean: While you might comment on the paper's strengths, your primary concern is to focus on its weaknesses, particularly in the areas of logic, structure, format, and overall development of argument. Be tactful and considerate in your comments, but critical all the same—do it nicely, but "let 'em have it." Praise and back-patting will not help your peer improve his or her paper.
Important: Write your response on notebook paper, not on a printout of this web page. Indicate your name as the "Peer" and your peer's name as "Author." Your response should be approximately 1½-2 pages, at least.
Instructions: Read the entire paper and then answer the following questions in order. Your comments are not restricted to these questions alone, though: any and all advice you can offer that might help your classmate improve the paper is appropriate.
1. Is the introduction neutral? Point out specific sentences in the intro that might give away the author's viewpoint. Also consider whether the introduction is adequately developed. If the paragraph seems at all brief or hasty—anything less than, say, half a page—suggest ways of setting up the topic more effectively or in greater depth.
2. Evaluate the central question raised at the end of the introduction. Does it a) define an issue that has two or more different "sides"? and b) address the assigned topic squarely? In these respects and in any others, suggest how the intro question might be sharpened or improved.
3. Does the body of the discussion address the issue raised in the "intro question," or does it stray in places, addressing other matters not strictly related to the intro question directly? Does the essay as a whole address the assigned topic? Indicate any places where the discussion gets away from focusing on the stated central issue or the assigned topic.
4a). If the paper addresses the Raisin in the Sun topic, does the author simply identify racial and universal issues in different paragraphs, or does each body paragraph truly argue that the play as a whole focuses more on one set of issues than the other (which is what the assignment intends). Explain which paragraphs are simplify identifying racial or universal issues without really arguing that they are so important to the play's overall focus in terms of theme or message.
4b). If the paper addresses the option on Pygmalion's relevance today, does the author follow instructions for giving "specific examples from 'our world' that either show connections between our world and Shaw's or demonstrate the difference between our world and that depicted in Pygmalion"? If needed, suggest other "real world" examples from today that fit any of the author's points on either side of the argument.
5. Evaluate the effectiveness of the "opposing views." Does the paper present the opposition viewpoint(s) fairly and fully? How could the opposing views be improved? Suggest additional opposing points.
6. Does the author succeed in refuting or discounting the opposing views? That is, does the author explain why the opposing views are not the best answer(s) to the intro question? Suggest improvements in refutation or concession.
7. Are the author's own primary points elaborated appropriately in separate paragraphs? Does the topic sentence in each paragraph of the author's views answer the intro question directly? Suggest improvements in the topic sentences and/or body paragraph structure.
8. Is the conclusion effective? Does it leave the reader impressed with the culmination of the writer's argument, or does it just fizzle out? Is the thesis clear in the conclusion? Is the paragraph adequately developed (i.e. somewhere near half a page in length)? Make specific suggestions for improvements in any areas needed in the conclusion.
9. Is the paper likely to convince the opposition to agree with the author? Explain.
10. Evaluate the author's use of quotations to support major points on both sides of the argument. Explain why ineffective quotes are ineffective, and if you can, suggest other quotes that might work better to illustrate the author's claims.
11. On the draft itself, identify problems in grammar, diction, punctuation, etc., paying special attention to the golden rules, nuggets, "simple stuff," and quotation and documentation items QD 1-5.